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If you've used our "Special Places to Love" lesson at the WritingFix Website-- (mentor text = All the Places to Love by Patricia MacLachlan)

 

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[Debbie Atkins]

Kaylin 6th Grade
My favorite place is going to the stables to ride a horse. When I ride, it brings back memories. It reminds me about the fun trips I went on. I ride many muddy trails and tall trees surround me. When you’re mad, riding can make you calm and also make you feel better. I like to feel the wind blow through my hair. The horse I rode is named Clyde. We have a lot in common. Every time I go horse-back riding, I ride Clyde because I already know how to ride him.


LJ 6th Grade
My special place is Florida because I had fun playing in the arcades. I didn’t enjoy anything else because it was boring. We were going to go to the pool but it rained a lot so we had plenty of entertainment playing arcade games. The arcade in the hotel had more variety than the one by the pool. When we were done playing we had a family dinner including my favorites: chicken, fries and pink lemonade. The last day we were there it was boring and hot, we just sat around the pool. I was sad that we had to leave Florida.

Dianah 6th Grade
My special place is Lost Valley Lake. I love Lost Valley Lake because it is exciting trying many new things. Although the speed limit was 20 mph, my dad was driving 50 mph, it was scary trip. Because the horse was friendly and gentle, I thought the horse ride was perfect. Since everyone was enjoying themselves, it was a dream come true.

[Tama Trotti]

Jim - 1st grade

My favorite place is Japan. The sushi is yummy. I take a plane to go to Japan. It is next to Malaysia. I sit in my hotel next to the sea and eat salty seaweed. I walk to the beach with my Mom. I see big fish in the sea.

 

Aliya - 1st Grade 

 

My favorite place is my room. In my room on top there is a soft curtain. I can swing on it. I swing on it across my room. The curtain is on the window. My bed is near the window. My room is next to my Mom's room.

 

James - 1st Grade 

My favorite place is Sentosa Beach in Singapore. We go across the bridge to an island. I saw fish swimming next to the shore. We wrote letters on the sand. Me and my mom had fun and  we made sandcastles in the sand.

[Stormy Conway]

My Special Place

By:  Hank H.-8th grade

 

            My special place is not actually a place but a part of the body.  This place is my head.  In this area I can do anything and go anywhere.

            I can look over the day and laugh at the mistakes I’ve made.  I think about past days and what I’m going to do the next day. When I’ve had enough of the world, I head to my room and think about random stuff while playing my acoustic guitar.  Sometimes I imagine myself onstage with a guitar and playing until it is on fire.  Then I think about when it was just Mom and I and how spoiled rotten I was towards her.  In my mind when I read books, I always get pictures about what’s happening. I mean I like being at school and stuff, but it gets interminable at times.  So this is my happy place, and I take advantage of it from time to time.

            Many people have special places.  Most places are restaurants, stores or even rooms in their homes.  On occasion they can go to theirs, which is very humdrum.  Whereas mine, I don’t have to hurtle to get to it.

 

 

A Special Place

David M.-8^th grade

 

I don’t mean this to be offensive in any way, but there is only a certain amount of family a person can take.  So when things get crazy, I like knowing I have somewhere to go to get away from the chaos.

            My cousin moved in only recently.  Before that I would basically storm in after a long day of school and claim my spot on the living room couch.  Today I can usually find that spot taken.  Since I really didn’t feel like competing for the living room TV remote like a starved pack of monkeys would fight over a banana, I starting using the game room as my getaway.  My game room started out as a small humdrum room connected to the garage.  The garage itself is separated from the house by an air of empty space and a couple of patio steps, so it provides enough distance to allow me to feel at peace.  When I first saw the room, I didn’t think it was anything special.  It was the kind of place barren of any color and life.  But with the help of my dad, I was able to transform it into my own little paradise.  Every now and then I might make some small renovations but for the moment the room has a tile floor that captures the American spirit with a red, white, and blue pattern and painted walls to match.  Being called a game room, it makes sense that I have a PS3 and a Wii sitting below an HDTV.  Because you can’t work a game console without games, I keep a collection on a shelf above a mini comfy couch.  Like I mentioned before, since the game room is adjacent to the garage I have access to a pool table and bathroom, so I’m all set.  After a while I started to notice that I spent more of my time in my game room than my actual room.  Even though I consider both places as sanctuaries, my game room provides with something I can’t live without:  freedom.

            Though in a way my game room is still under construction, it’s a great place to go when I need to keep my space from the horde.  That’s why I like to think of my game room as my home 12 ft. from home.

 

[Rachel Lally]

I have attached three samples from my fifth graders based on Of All the Places to Love.  the lesson really helped them expand their word choice and sentence fluency.

[Stephanie Panfel]

The Creek

By: Jennavieve  - 5th Grader

Of all the places to love my favorite is the creek. When I am there I can taste the blackberries tart like someone pinched my mouth. I can taste the cold silky water pinch my tongue for it is so cold. 

And if you stop and listen you can hear the doe crunch on the grass. Also when she runs away you can hear the crunch of the leaves beneath her hooves. Then the pitter patters of the crayfish on the stones like little raindrops.

When you get lonely touch the warm bark of a growing tree and feel its insides growing. And if you get lucky and get minnows in a bucket you can feel the slimy backs that will tingle up your back. While you splash through the water you feel the icy cold water under your toes making you cringe them.

When you look around a bit you see the spooky shadows of the animals lurking nearby. You can see the minnow’s race around in little schools. And when the sun starts going down it looks as if the trees are going to reach up for the sun to snatch it down. And you may see a crayfish scatter under a rock.

Then you sniff about and smell the maple oozing out of the trees.You can smell the fish that smells of mud. Also if I really smell around I can smell the smoke coming from our house and the warmth carries me home.